Paksworld

For the past week, I’ve been working on the revisions my editor sent me (in two parts), and it occurred to me that the process might be interesting to you.  I can’t share exactly what my editor said, because since she and I both know what’s in the book, our communications are just about solid Spoiler.   But with a little judicious tweaking, I think I can give you a taste of the experience of being edited by an excellent editor, though it will reveal some of my weaknesses as a writer.

Editorial comments  fall into three basic categories: the surface-level error…the structural glitch….the foundational/design disaster.  Within quote marks is the original text; the comments outside quote marks are my editors, suitably trimmed to avoid spoilerish revelations.  Square brackets are where I inserted a substitute, non-spoiler, filler.

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This snippet is from a passage that will not appear in the book–my choice, not an editor’s cut, so the scene was never fully fleshed out.  You have conversation, nothing else.   However, as a snippet, I don’t mind sharing it with you.  I believe, when the book comes out, you will agree that this and the extension of it (several more pages full of spoilers) were better left out.

Location:  Verella, the Verrakai house in town.  Time: 14 days after Kieri Phelan left Verella for Lyonya

Speakers:  Duke Haron Verrakai and his brother.

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You might want to check out the links page here from time to time.   I’m (slowly and carefully) adding links to vendors of weapons and other items you might find in this story universe.   So far only two, but this will grow.   This is not so you can have your very own crossbow or sword, but mostly for those who have no clear idea in mind what something mentioned looks like…I’ll be referencing these sites as a place to go.

The links page is also the easy way to get to the Paksworld website and to the publisher sites…or to my home page or LJ.