Local experienced alpha reader, having read the latest (until this morning) version of a chapter, thought it much improved but still needing a tweak or two.\u00a0 And finally got it through my head exactly what was bothering him.<\/p>\n
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So this morning, the solution popped into my head…oh! Of course!\u00a0\u00a0 Decompress this too “tight” bit, open it out to a conversation, and bingo…dealt with.<\/p>\n
Even smaller thing…to head off the “why didn’t X just ask Y that simple Question Z?” that otherwise apparently sticks out,\u00a0 a single sentence reveals that Question Z is extremely rude when directed to an elf, and in Lyonya almost no one asks Z of anyone.\u00a0\u00a0 It Just Isn’t Done.<\/p>\n
Local experienced alpha reader sent a thumbs-up.<\/p>\n
Meanwhile, last night I figured out what happened to the unexploded ordnance he needed to have found in this first chapter of his new one,\u00a0 so it would be clear that sabotage had occurred.\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 Heh-heh-heh….<\/p>\n
Meanwhile again,\u00a0 I’ve found another four wonderful-perfect-diamond-studded pages (in what is now chapter ten after some rearrangement) that maybe should be cut.\u00a0\u00a0 Or perhaps written in another POV (oh, gee, just rewriting a mere 800-1000 words in another POV…that’s nothing, right?)<\/p>\n
Yeah, I think re-writing this is called for.\u00a0 Sigh.\u00a0 Grump. Whine.\u00a0 Moan.\u00a0 Complain.\u00a0 (Just shut up already and DO IT says something in my head.)\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 But it’s pretty and I wanted to sit out by the water garden…\u00a0 (You had your walk on the land already.\u00a0 Quit griping and get busy.)\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 And I need to work on that Nunc Dimittis<\/em> and I’m not sure of that five measure bit in the Magnificat<\/em>…\u00a0 (GET BUSY.\u00a0 On your WORK.)<\/p>\n Later, folks.<\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":" Local experienced alpha reader, having read the latest (until this morning) version of a chapter, thought it much improved but still needing a tweak or two.\u00a0 And finally got it through my head exactly what was bothering him.<\/p>\n","protected":false},"author":2,"featured_media":0,"comment_status":"open","ping_status":"open","sticky":false,"template":"","format":"standard","meta":{"footnotes":""},"categories":[45,5],"tags":[20,51,107],"class_list":["post-447","post","type-post","status-publish","format-standard","hentry","category-revisions","category-the-writing-life","tag-progress-report","tag-revision","tag-the-writing-life"],"_links":{"self":[{"href":"http:\/\/www.paksworld.com\/blog\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/posts\/447"}],"collection":[{"href":"http:\/\/www.paksworld.com\/blog\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/posts"}],"about":[{"href":"http:\/\/www.paksworld.com\/blog\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/types\/post"}],"author":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"http:\/\/www.paksworld.com\/blog\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/users\/2"}],"replies":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"http:\/\/www.paksworld.com\/blog\/index.php?rest_route=%2Fwp%2Fv2%2Fcomments&post=447"}],"version-history":[{"count":1,"href":"http:\/\/www.paksworld.com\/blog\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/posts\/447\/revisions"}],"predecessor-version":[{"id":448,"href":"http:\/\/www.paksworld.com\/blog\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/posts\/447\/revisions\/448"}],"wp:attachment":[{"href":"http:\/\/www.paksworld.com\/blog\/index.php?rest_route=%2Fwp%2Fv2%2Fmedia&parent=447"}],"wp:term":[{"taxonomy":"category","embeddable":true,"href":"http:\/\/www.paksworld.com\/blog\/index.php?rest_route=%2Fwp%2Fv2%2Fcategories&post=447"},{"taxonomy":"post_tag","embeddable":true,"href":"http:\/\/www.paksworld.com\/blog\/index.php?rest_route=%2Fwp%2Fv2%2Ftags&post=447"}],"curies":[{"name":"wp","href":"https:\/\/api.w.org\/{rel}","templated":true}]}}